I just loved this. Great story. Cyberpunk with lots of violence, just the way I like it. Reminded me of Akudama Drive and Psycho-Pass.
The first chapter is just perfect. It sets tone, introduces all major characters, prepares us for what's to come. Pro work right there.
Jenna's and Vance's characters felt a little bland. The former is pretty much Angelina Jolie in Girl, Interrupted, and Vance is every movie security guard or sargeant ever.
The fact that they are undead is terrifying. They are being used for work and kept alive with some "gene-hacking" stuff (that is not explained, but it didn't need to). This is pretty much Horror.
There is not much infodump--pretty much just a little at the beginning of the second chapter and some "as you know, Bob" dialogues here and there--, and I didn't feel overwhelmed with information.
The author foreshadowed that the priest would have a major part in this story. I realized that a priest is always lurking somewhere. The first one appears with his eyes "glittering with greed". It was a good setup.
The explosion happens on the exact moment that MC would be caught with the shiv in her pocket. Felt like deus ex machina. The exact time and place.
The fight against the guard at the end is a great fight scene. Strong verbs like rushed, lunged and juked are used. It's gritty and fast--just like it should be in this occasion. It's not a supervillain fight: you get stabbed, you die. No ceremonies. I just felt like MC won the fight pretty easily though.
I very much liked the ending. She's reflecting about what had happened and what would happen. The majority of short-stories tend to end abruptly. This one ended with an entire chapter dedicated to a somewhat philosophical thinking. It worked. And it was also uplifting as hell to see Vance back as a ghoul (that's her, right? ???), the same way Jenna was presented at the beginning.
This is a 9,5/10.