Okay, now THIS was an awesomely evil story. The narrator hooked me in and I was able to visualize this distopian amusement park. The hidden razor wire barricades hidden in the bushes... the strategically released odours to mask the smell of burning townships, sewage, or whatever ELSE was dead or dying outside the Happiest-Place was clever. The security teams (or Quality Assurance supervisors) with their reflective visors and bunny ears (?!) was an unnerving image. Nice!
The narrator had me hooked and captured the idealism and the corporate-buy-in of our foam, dogheaded character.
My only problem with the story was its abrupt ending. The story came across as unfinished. We see our...
protagonist, strapped to a gurney, being transported to the lower levels of the park... the hidden rooms where the nasty R&D takes place, and to the ....?!..... A meat locker where the administrators chop his head off? To the oubliette? To the staff lounge? This story felt unfinished and that's a shame.
I'm satisfied with an unresolved ending. In the movie,
Inception, the 'true' fate of the Matt Damon character is unknown (did he reach the waking world and his children... or is he still locked up in a lucid dream). His totem keeps spinning, and then.......fade to black. I liked this ending because a conversation between movie viewers can ensure.
Strong start... intriguing middle act.... secrets are about to be revealed... and 'cut'.