Mindreader’s Guide to Surviving Your First Year at the All-Girls Superhero Academy
I’ve had some issues with the suspension of disbelief. Firstly, it would be impossible to live with an uncontrollable mindreading power, or a power that explodes things just if you think about it. If you read everybody’s thoughts involuntarily, you wouldn’t be able to have thoughts of your own; if you consider something exploding, your life would be a Vietnam war. (that’s why the whole concept of superheroes and superpowers makes no sense, but that’s another topic). Also, sending them to school makes much less sense. They have different powers. The teachers wouldn’t be able to handle them. The schooling should’ve been individualized. This is a problem in real life already; with people having different abilities and different weaknesses, one homeroom teacher, teaching a single method, just cannot be good for everybody. (that’s why our school system makes no sense and makes us dumb, but that’s a WHOLE new topic).
That’s why this why a dark comedy to me. The absurd names of the classes, such as Resisting Torture and Hostage Negotiations, that only appear as deus ex machinas, also made me laugh.
Ending was too sudden. I think that this story was not right for flash-fiction. It would work better as a longer story.
Chameleon
This works better as a flash-fiction piece. It is also funny. I liked the metaphor and the double mumbo jumbo (R.I.P Blake Snyder).
Damn Generation Z!
The First Stop Is Always the Last
The concept here is awesome. You get confused at first, but then it all makes sense. Also, a great metaphor.
The fact that the driver realized that time was repeating made me laugh.
The author, Wiswll, seems to be very talented. I had read Open House on Haunted Hill a couple months ago, and I enjoyed it.
PS.: The narrator sounded exceptionally low on this one.
In general, I found all of them to be funny. The first one, maybe for the wrong reasons. Chameleon and The First Stop is Always the Last work well as flash-fiction and have satisfying endings. Mindreader’s Guide to Surviving Your First Year at the All-Girls Superhero Academy leaves you wanting more.
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I just wanna go pro before AI takes over and the bot dogs from Boston Dynamics kill us all.