This one gets a negative reaction from me. It's not a strong negative, but I was just completely unimpressed.
1. The boyfriend's transition from friendly guy to psycho killer is far too abrupt. I realize it can SEEM that way in real life, but some inconsipicuous foreshadowing would have been nice.
2. Who didn't see the ending coming? Ghost of animal friend saves lady. That was definately not a shock. Played it straight right up to the last.
3. Maybe this is just me, but I found this whole thing positively oozing with sickly-sweet sentimentality. From the friendly critters all too happy to help in an all-too-human way (as if a ferret would know to bring you scissors) to the vengeful animal ghosts to the happy little parade at the end - this was pretty darn close to a Disney movie in my opinion.
4. The language was lackluster. Clumsy metaphor and nothing that stood out. The pacing was good though, cannot fault it there. The tension might have existed, had the ending not been foregone. Not to be judgemental or imply anything here, but it felt like the author was simply not brave enough to have anything legitimately bad happen to the protagonist.
EDIT: forgot to add that the reading was GREAT, as was the outro.