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L, do you know, gods of death love apples?
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« Reply #1 on: November 18, 2008, 09:14:42 am » |
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This has to be the shortest flash fiction on record.
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God masturbates every time you kill a kitten.
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Zathras
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« Reply #2 on: November 19, 2008, 12:36:41 pm » |
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I'd say this one was cute, but that seems inappropriate.
How about naughty?
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« Reply #3 on: November 20, 2008, 03:36:14 am » |
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If you right something this short, it needs to be tighter. The moment she said "chastity" the game was over, and the rest of the story was just going through the motion. A couple of wasted sentences doesn't sound like a lot, but when the whole story is about 5 sentences long, that's way too much.
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Anarkey
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« Reply #4 on: November 20, 2008, 10:32:19 am » |
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This one got a laugh out of me.
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DKT
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« Reply #5 on: November 20, 2008, 11:54:36 am » |
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This one got a laugh out of me.
I laughed and then it was over. Pretty good timing, I thought. The author knew when to end it. |
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« Reply #6 on: November 20, 2008, 03:39:10 pm » |
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I giggled.
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« Reply #8 on: November 21, 2008, 10:38:28 am » |
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Now I can hear Mike Meyers saying all kinds of Austin Powers quotes about this one.
MAKE IT STOP!
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« Reply #9 on: November 26, 2008, 06:30:07 am » |
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Ohhhhhh, it's a PENIS...
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Not impressed or amused.
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DKT
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« Reply #10 on: November 30, 2008, 05:44:19 pm » |
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Ohhhhhh, it's a PENIS...
Dude, it's pronounced PEA-NIS.  *ba-dump ching* |
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« Reply #11 on: November 30, 2008, 05:47:34 pm » |
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Dude, it's pronounced PEA-NIS. *ba-dump ching* ::groan:: |
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DKT
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« Reply #12 on: December 01, 2008, 08:16:12 am » |
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Dude, it's pronounced PEA-NIS. *ba-dump ching* ::groan:: Wow. Deja vu! |
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« Reply #13 on: December 01, 2008, 02:16:11 pm » |
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Dude, it's pronounced PEA-NIS. *ba-dump ching* ::groan:: Wow. Deja vu! A good pun should always incur a groan. I just felt that your recent contributions to the art form should be ack!nowledged. Besides, I beat you to this week's Pseudopod pun! |
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Bdoomed
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« Reply #14 on: December 01, 2008, 09:56:31 pm » |
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Besides, I beat you to this week's Pseudopod pun!
Pseudopun |
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Raving_Lunatic
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« Reply #15 on: December 02, 2008, 02:04:43 pm » |
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This one was very punchy. OK, I suppose.
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« Reply #16 on: December 03, 2008, 09:00:32 am » |
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I'll second the not-quite-cute idea. Liked it, sort of loved it.
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Oh, great and mighty Alasdair, Orator Maleficent, He of the Silvered Tongue, guide this humble fangirl past jumping up and down and squeeing upon hearing the greatness of Thy voice.
Oh mighty Mur the Magnificent. I am not worthy.
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« Reply #17 on: November 12, 2009, 01:00:23 pm » |
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The Penis Mightier for 500, Alex!
Cute, in a dirty way, and I find the reluctance to finish the idea in the title silly and funny.
But I've got to agree with eytanz that it could've been trimmed a bit, when "chastity" was mentioned the story was pretty much over.
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