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Reply #25 on: November 11, 2009, 09:14:59 PM
I got the message very early on in the story, or at least A message summed up as this:
"You can only be happy when you enjoy what you have (like soup).  If you dwell on what will be, what should be, or what was you will never find happiness."  A good moral, no doubt about it.

And then the same moral was shown twice more, and I said "so what?" and wanted it to go somewhere new, but it didn't.  I realize that repetition in 3's is common in this sort of tale, but I'd like the 2nd and 3rd to add something new.

And it's kind of cute to show the 2nd sib instead of the 3rd, but that alone wasn't enough to carry the story.