In acknowledging the comments of most about atmospherics trumping coherence (personally, I don't see it, but I'm closer to the text than anyone, so that's understandable), do you think that if you were to actually read the story, you would have had a different response?
Almost certainly, in my case. When listening to an audio story I am, to some extent, listening to the reader's interpretation. Assuming they've read it through themselves to determine how present characters, words, phrases, it can't help being anything but.
When I read a story from the page, I have a -- was going to say "more intimate connection to the story" but I'm not sure that's true. Anyway, I set my own pace through the text; I can stop if I want to and go back; I can stop and savour a particularly visceral or poignant or flat-out beautiful piece of prose.
I'm certainly saying nothing new here, so I'm not sure I'm answering your question -- perhaps I'm interpreting it too literally?
As to what I want from a Pseudopod experience -- well, that varies. I can try to explain why some of my favourites are, in fact, favourites -- HTH.
6, "What Dead People Are Supposed To Do" -- I loved this because it's an hilarious story. Arguably not horror -- except for the zombies -- it was a hell of a great ride and very well-read. (Even my wife liked this one). Atmosphere: not at all scary.
13, "Redmond's Private Screening" -- a great piece. It drew me in with its tension building to an act of harakiri, graphically described. The story that followed -- essentially ghostly revenge -- was well done with a bloody ending. Atmosphere: more of a tension and "eeew OUCH" piece for me, although the resolution was satisfying.
45, "The Goon Job" -- was a clever piece of writing, describing a world I'd like to hear more of. Atmosphere: graphic but not scary.
(I'm starting to feel like a real pretentious dick here, so I'll stop after the next)
134, "Bait" -- my all-time PP fave so far, this probably qualifies as an atmosphere piece. As several commented, the premise, the twist, was telegraphed early on, but that didn't matter to me. I think the claustrophobic and intensely focused setting (the... thoughts? obsession? of one man) threw the events into sharp relief in such a way that the arguable flaws in the story didn't matter. I must also say that the reading, for me, contributed in NO SMALL PART to the whole -- it was stunning. Atmosphere: creepy. chilling.
So look, I really hope this helps. And please remember, few here have said your story was awful, because it wasn't -- the atmosphere thing worked in spades!! If you have the time maybe listen to "Bait" to see one person's reaction to a great piece of audiopod (is that a word?)
Also... there's a reason I chose this moniker ;-)