This story is a little clumsy in execution, I think it would read better, it had some trouble as an audio piece. Specifically there was some unattributed back and forth dialog that was confusing with only the one reader, but by far this pice was thought provoking.
I found Ramon
s character to be much too one dimentional and obviously from the beginning I knew he was going to wind up out as his character was too flat and unresponsive. I think he could have made a better character and still been the antagonist without too much effort. I would have liked to see his frustration or some conflict between him and the household. The situation with the household was too shallow. Maybe its cultural but I know I am unfamiliar with taking in a brother and sister for the summer whom I dont know...
I do like the device of the scorpion, and while paying homage to the old scorpion motto, "It is in my nature," the story deconstructed that and made the destruction of the white scorpion the fault of human nature. The White scorpion as far as I could tell was not aggressive and the second white scorpion seemed to be of the same kind. It is the people in the story that are brutal and killers. The victims in this story are the scorpions who are either killed outright, or even worse, used for a person's own goals.
I am not sure I agree that Beatrice fell in love, I think she fell more out of love with her ambitions as she wasn't willing to play/pay the price of Ramon. She was no longer willing to stay frozen as in her family photo. She dimensioned out as a character, but still fell into the trap of human nature.