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« Reply #20 on: April 13, 2011, 06:15:51 AM »

For my commentary, read what Scattercat said, because I feel basically the same way: http://forum.escapeartists.net/index.php?topic=4831.msg87329#msg87329

But I did really like the ending, when they're working together.
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« Reply #21 on: April 18, 2011, 06:52:06 AM »

I really enjoyed this; it's a simple tale but full of personality. Although I did have to wonder how the evil Wizard stays in business! Made me smile, so a good start to a Monday.
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« Reply #22 on: April 27, 2011, 10:25:22 PM »

Hmph. Cute. White bread beginning, white bread ending, but some definite sort of meat in the middle. I think I would have like a bit more in the way of strangeness to help me out, but I did like the uncle choosing bits. Quite a lot.
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« Reply #23 on: May 03, 2011, 10:54:37 AM »

Interesting story. Sort of the opposite of "Honing Sebastian", don't you think? Although I do think it was a bit light towards the end. The fact that the kid ran across the pond out of accident instead of on purpose felt too random for me.
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« Reply #24 on: May 12, 2011, 03:04:56 AM »

I think I must be being incredibly dim this morning (in my defence it is still early). I came on here to see if anyone was as confused as I am about the ending of this one, but no-one seems to have been vexed by it like I am. It all makes sense right up to the last line of dialog:

"What do you want?"

"The Evil Wizard," Smallbone said.

Eh? Who's that who's just come into the shop? Another Mr Smallbone? What's all that about? Is this something to do with the door spell (the old wizard going out back and coming in front)? Why?

Please help me.

Otherwise I enjoyed the story for what it was, and liked the old-style omniscient storytelling mode.
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« Reply #25 on: May 12, 2011, 06:14:14 AM »

I think I must be being incredibly dim this morning (in my defence it is still early). I came on here to see if anyone was as confused as I am about the ending of this one, but no-one seems to have been vexed by it like I am. It all makes sense right up to the last line of dialog:

"What do you want?"

"The Evil Wizard," Smallbone said.

Eh? Who's that who's just come into the shop? Another Mr Smallbone? What's all that about? Is this something to do with the door spell (the old wizard going out back and coming in front)? Why?

Please help me.

Otherwise I enjoyed the story for what it was, and liked the old-style omniscient storytelling mode.

The story doesn't say who came in the front door, it doesn't matter. The young guy dressed up like the Evil Mr. Smallbone to maintain the illusion that there's an Evil Wizard working there, not just a wizard and his apprentice. he didn't go out and come back in, he moved from the backroom to the front room, then let in whomever had come calling and began his act.
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« Reply #26 on: May 12, 2011, 11:10:27 AM »

I think I must be being incredibly dim this morning (in my defence it is still early). I came on here to see if anyone was as confused as I am about the ending of this one, but no-one seems to have been vexed by it like I am. It all makes sense right up to the last line of dialog:

"What do you want?"

"The Evil Wizard," Smallbone said.

Eh? Who's that who's just come into the shop? Another Mr Smallbone? What's all that about? Is this something to do with the door spell (the old wizard going out back and coming in front)? Why?

Please help me.

Otherwise I enjoyed the story for what it was, and liked the old-style omniscient storytelling mode.

The story doesn't say who came in the front door, it doesn't matter. The young guy dressed up like the Evil Mr. Smallbone to maintain the illusion that there's an Evil Wizard working there, not just a wizard and his apprentice. he didn't go out and come back in, he moved from the backroom to the front room, then let in whomever had come calling and began his act.

Pretty much this. Essentially at the end of the story, Smallbone and Nick are both wizards. They just have to arm-wrestle for who's going to dress up as the evil wizard and go deal with the paying customers.
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« Reply #27 on: May 12, 2011, 02:35:50 PM »

Essentially at the end of the story, Smallbone and Nick are both wizards. They just have to arm-wrestle for who's going to dress up as the evil wizard and go deal with the paying customers.

Or rather, who's not going to.
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« Reply #28 on: May 12, 2011, 03:21:17 PM »

Right!

Sorry, I was projecting there. I always want to be the evil wizard  Wink
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« Reply #29 on: May 12, 2011, 10:20:47 PM »

Right!

Sorry, I was projecting there. I always want to be the evil wizard  Wink

No, don't tell me... you put on your wizard hat and robe, right?
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« Reply #30 on: May 13, 2011, 09:27:21 AM »

Right!

Sorry, I was projecting there. I always want to be the evil wizard  Wink

I just can't imagine a maniacal laugh coming from you, DKT.
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« Reply #31 on: January 09, 2012, 01:11:20 AM »

This is a "Fun" story in the true sense. It's like an old fastioned hero drama, just it happens to be a wizard instead. It's pure frivilous fun that leaves you cheering at the end. I loved it. It had just the right amount of twists and turns and a book store I want to visit.
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« Reply #32 on: February 07, 2012, 09:18:52 PM »

I think I must be being incredibly dim this morning (in my defence it is still early). I came on here to see if anyone was as confused as I am about the ending of this one, but no-one seems to have been vexed by it like I am. It all makes sense right up to the last line of dialog:

"What do you want?"

"The Evil Wizard," Smallbone said.

Eh? Who's that who's just come into the shop? Another Mr Smallbone? What's all that about? Is this something to do with the door spell (the old wizard going out back and coming in front)? Why?

Please help me.

I was in the same boat. It still doesn't quite jive for me. If "The evil wizard" is in response to the evil wizard's question to the visitor, why did Smallbone say it?

e.g.

This works for me:
Person playing the evil wizard: "What do you want?"
Visitor: "The evil wizard"

This doesn't:
Person playing the evil wizard: "What do you want?"
Smallbone: "The evil wizard"
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