Glad you liked it KIBITZER, bit freaky with the news story two days before the story was released, I never thought they'd find the bodies.
MEGAFLOW- Thank you for your comments, but I feel I have to reply in order to answer your questions. The reason you think the story never really goes anywhere, because it can't. He's stuck in the pit with nowhere to go. I suggest as to why the horror has little effect on him, this guy is a gangster, he's killed, he's used to death and blood. Plus the painkillers and booze maybe numb him from what he see's.
As for the ending, I wanted to leave it up to the reader/listener to make up their own mind what happens. What do you think his chances are with a gangrened leg, alone in the desert should he even manages to escape the mine shaft?
I have considered writing a sequel where he escapes the shaft and plots revenge on his bosses, but I think for the time being I'll leave it open to you to decide how it ends.
Should you wish to peruse more of my work check out March, May, June, July, December 2010, and March 2011 winners on
www.spinetinglers.co.uk. Less crime more Horror. If you've too much money check out Tales of a Woman Scorned, Quakes and Storms, Soup of Souls all from
www.panicpress.org. Let me know if you like any of these.
Cheers Nat