Ehh, I'm solidly with Eytanz on this one. The sudden POV shift to Ben felt particularly egregious and just made the change in Claire all the more unsatisfying. A more gradual process would have been preferable, I think, rather than skipping four of the garages entirely. I would also have enjoyed a story that employed Eytanz' suggestion of having Ben be the POV character the whole time. Overall, this felt like a Call of Cthulhu game module more than a really good story to me. It functioned, it wasn't bad or unreadable (unlistenable), but it didn't do much to fire me up. Been here, done this, oh, so very many times, and nothing particularly new to see in this iteration. The characters were rather flat, and the dialogue wasn't particularly evocative for me. (That final scene just had some real clunkers in it, especially Ben. Fear in dialogue is a potentially powerful tool, but this seemed like more of a placeholder, like, "Oh, Ben's got to say something here to break up the monologue. Eh, it doesn't matter much. He'll just babble a bit.") Claire's memories of her childhood and the trauma of her mother's death felt pasted-on rather than an integral part of her character.
I think the story would have been stronger if her father actually HAD been sculpting her from a very young age, if we could have seen glimpses of odd instructions and strange events that she'd dismissed as childish misunderstandings and poor recollection taking on new and more disturbing shapes as she progresses down the path, if we could have heard some echoes of the moral instruction he gave her and watched it gradually grow more and more perverted and excessive. (Start with some normal warnings to a small child about being careful to always stay safe, even if others are in danger, because "you're so important to me," and then ratcheting that up and up until we get to something like, "No one has the right to stop you from taking what you want. Be a wolf among men," etc.) I dunno. This one was just a total whiff for me. An old idea executed with a businesslike and straightforward approach, no nonsense and no twists. I can see the appeal, the nod to the stories of yore, but for me, I like a bit more meat to chew over.