A well done example of dropping the read in the middle of: "What in the world is going on?!? This is crazy!" and gradually unfolding the situation until almost everything makes sense.
Another thing, the changing of time frames.
This is a complaint that gets heard a lot, that it is often hard to tell in audio when a new sequence begins that takes the reader/listener back in time to a previous point, and then back to the "present". It gets confusing and results in some serious mental-gear clashing.
Perhaps our fine editors - who do an extraordinary job - can introduce some kind of audible cue that signifies that large white space or three spaced asterisks you get in text....
Ditto. That little touch could greatly increase comprehensibility. We can't see
the line breaks, so put in something audible.