I enjoyed the story, although it seemed to start out a bit slow. I liked the switching of the viewpoints in order to keep the POV tight and focused; a lot of writers in my crit group seem to have a distaste for third-person-limited POV, to their detriment. Also, any story with flatulence and eructation is automatically appealing to my inner 12-year-old (because, seriously, what 12-year-old boy didn't think both of those things were fabulously rich veins of humorous material?), so that's a plus.
As someone who's come into atheism in the past five years, I kind of wonder how an atheist would be treated in Ahmed's world -- a world where the power of God is clearly demonstrable by the magic that men like the Doctor do. (I mean, it COULD just be that they have Ahmedichlorians in their blood and putting a scaffolding of religion around it makes it more "palatable", similar to how Randall Garrett did in his Lord Darcy stories with Sean the sorcerer, but without reading more works set in this universe I can't know for certain what the magic system really is -- the power of God, or Ahmedichlorians.)
(I just like saying Ahmedichlorians. Because I like making up my own portmanteaus.)
Overall a good episode.