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Author Topic: Pseudopod 347: Flash On The Borderlands XVI: Trial & Discipline  (Read 6356 times)
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« Reply #20 on: September 05, 2013, 05:52:44 PM »

Passing Grade - This wasn't a complete story and I felt it didn't really work at all for me. Flash fiction is short but it isn't just a few paragraphs from a large piece which is exactly what this felt like. The whole thing felt like it was crying out for a reason to care and once again we had the well worn and over-used trope of the non-ending. I am actively loathing this trope now. Sometimes a story needs proper closure, please.

Killing Machine - Killing Machine was simply phenomenal. One of the best things I've heard in many months. The world building was immaculate, creepy and utterly believable. I thought once the last announcement was made that would be the end of the story but instead it ramped up from there to a brilliant and effecting ending. Just brilliant, the sound, the writing all of it.

Awaiting Redemption - I enjoyed this but it wasn't amazing. Maybe following on from 'Killing Machine' it was cast in an unfair light. Of all of them though I thought that this would be the most interesting as a bigger piece.
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« Reply #21 on: September 10, 2013, 11:45:44 PM »

Passing Grade
I really enjoyed this one, in particular the way everything started accelerating at the end.  I couldn't help thinking, though, that I knew who he should call.

The Killing Machine
I loved this one up until about 8/10s of the way through, when it started just openly exhorting everyone to kill themselves and then had an actual scene of it happening.  I loved the implication of it and was disappointed that it had to spell it out.  I honestly think it would have been better if that final scene were excised; not only does it not mesh stylistically, but it makes explicit (and thus less frightening) the whole purpose and function of the operation, whereas I was much more convicted and empathetic when I tacitly understood what the facility wanted from its charges.  That is, the reason I felt guilty was because the story didn't have to tell me; I knew what it meant, which means I understood all too well the forces driving the creation and maintenance of this place.  Once it steps outside of my head and starts trying to gross me out, I become distanced and am no longer receiving the full impact.

(And why am I not surprised that Shawn had a full playlist of atonal ambient/discord music?  :-P)

Awaiting Redemption
Ehh... by far the weakest for me.  It might have more resonance if I had the energy these days to think of religion with anything more than a sort of resigned, "Oh, yes.  That."  It felt a skosh torture-porny, and frankly her cutting her burn scar into a cross just struck me more as goofy than horrific.  The bad man was so egregiously, cartoonishly bad that I had little empathy for anyone in the story.  The most interesting part to me was the description of the girl's home village eating itself in its own version of religious mania; it gave her a little more complexity and lent a decently dark edge to her apparent adoption of her own faith-based revenge plans.  There was an awful lot of relatively flavorless breading around that particular McNugget, though.
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« Reply #22 on: January 22, 2014, 04:02:41 PM »

Late listen to 347, loved the first tale, found Killing Machine quite engaging, but considered Redemption the worst Pseudopod story i've ever heard.

I've never been kicked out of story immersion harder and faster by a Pseudopod story.  For a story that was supposed to be about the use of religion by humans for their own ends, it sure was poorly researched and written.  Not to mention to the excessive use of done to death tropes.  The Muslim slaver characters were such poor stereotypes of poor stereotypes, it was laughable, even verging on racist.
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« Reply #23 on: August 09, 2018, 01:55:24 PM »

The first music broadcast in Killing Machine was quite possibly the most horrifying thing I have ever heard. Bravo.
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« Reply #24 on: August 09, 2018, 02:49:03 PM »

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« Reply #25 on: September 12, 2018, 12:08:17 PM »

i really like the idea of the story it was nice though
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