This Story didn't do a lot for me. I thought the humor was not up to the level that Steve hyped it to be at the beginning. It was not a bad story and I know from experience that first person is very hard to pull off and sound credible. So I think the writing was over all pretty good. I just didn't care much for the story.
Two thoughts on the the closing comments by Steve. First, I did like that the quote you (Steve) used that was about what a superhero should be. Paraphrasing here as it is already gone from my iPod. A superhero is the guy in tights that saves the person in need. Second, there was a comment about giving children the keys to the reality and letting them take it out for a spin. This is a very popular theme in literature, that I personally have been exploring for a long time. If you want to see one of the best examples of it, you have to look no further than The Lord of the Rings. The Elves, going away are the old, the Wizards are the middle aged and the children are the Hobbits, a young race so young they are not recorded in the lore of the trees. I believe, and I again I am paraphrasing here, that you (Steve) said something to the effect of give the power to the adults and they would screw it up. "You have to understand Frodo I would take the ring in order to do good, but through me..." and of course "...Instead of a dark lord you would you would have a queen..." And I would have to agree with it, adults although we may be more wise than our children, most the time can't see through our own wisdom to the simple truths.