The explosion happens on the
exact moment that MC would be caught with the shiv in her pocket. Felt like deus ex machina. The exact time and place.
The fight against the guard at the end is a great fight scene. Strong verbs like rushed, lunged and juked are used. It's gritty and fast--just like it should be in this occasion. It's not a supervillain fight: you get stabbed, you die. No ceremonies. I just felt like MC won the fight pretty easily though.
I very much liked the ending. She's reflecting about what had happened and what would happen. The majority of short-stories tend to end abruptly. This one ended with an entire chapter dedicated to a somewhat philosophical thinking. It worked. And it was also uplifting as hell to see Vance back as a ghoul (
that's her, right? ), the same way Jenna was presented at the beginning.