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on: February 26, 2009, 07:38:25 AM
Flash: Rosemary Lane

By Kate Kelly

Read by Alasdair Stuart

I could see the fear in her eyes, and I drew back into the thickets of thorns and nettles, watching her. She was the first person I had seen in the lane for many years, one of the village children, one of the innocents. I did not wish to frighten her, and I felt my loneliness rush in on me like a tide. But she fled, a scrabble of scuffed shoes on the loose stones and she was gone, running through the meadow grass and buttercups, scattering the sheep in her haste. I drifted back into the shadows and wallowed in remorse.

The girl must have told them about me, for the children came back, the boys leading the way, goading, teasing, daring each other to be brave, the girls hanging back in the long grass. They came up to the bank, laughing, throwing stones into the shadows; but stones can’t hurt me, not any more.



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Reply #1 on: February 26, 2009, 02:43:12 PM
Not impressed.

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Reply #2 on: February 26, 2009, 05:57:21 PM
This is the sort of story that ends up being damned with faint praise. It didn't do anything wrong. It just didn't do much else, either.


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Reply #3 on: February 27, 2009, 12:39:27 PM
well... it was well read. Everything else? a bit on the shallow side, everything was obvious. The way things were worded was pretty, a bit purple at times, but pretty.

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Reply #4 on: February 27, 2009, 12:45:29 PM
Another kiddie story.  I'm sorry, but, even in flash, I've come to expect better from EA.  It didn't do anything wrong, but it didn't do anything right, either.

At least EP was worth the wait.


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Reply #5 on: September 02, 2009, 03:34:17 PM
Quote from: eytanz on February 26, 2009, 05:57:21 PM
This is the sort of story that ends up being damned with faint praise. It didn't do anything wrong. It just didn't do much else, either.

ditto


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Reply #6 on: September 03, 2009, 12:13:04 AM
I think eytanz pretty much nailed it.  I liked this story, but it felt more like a piece of inter-chapter fiction in a roleplaying game from White Wolf than anything else.  Mildly interesting, good for setting the tone, but not amazing and demanding repeated readings to squeeze the meanings out.


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