I too had issues with the editing -- specifically the lack of voice-changes in the quick conversation, and the overlaid breaths under the narrator's speech.
Dude, seriously? Paint rags? When my wife was nesting for our kid, she didn't find ANYTHING I keep under the bed. And you don't have a secret folder on the computer, either? Magazines? Who reads THOSE anymore?
Too much info? Oh well.
Anyway.
I did love that he crushed the first big bug with porn. And the little "we have to childproof this place" bit was cute.
The story was really vivid and good to listen to -- even as I mowed the lawn, kicking up dozens of bugs every minute -- but the whole "giving yourself over to purification by fire" thing was a little over-the-top. You have an unborn child and you're going to give up? I mean, sure, lots of bugs, but... *shrug*
One other thing: this author must HATE the Girl Scouts. I think this story is a gigantic metaphor for the annoying way they sell those overpriced cookies.