Author Topic: PC123: Black Feather  (Read 19139 times)

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Reply #25 on: September 25, 2010, 02:57:54 PM
The counter-argument, however, is that airplanes and birds don't really fly under their own power. They exploit a law of gas dynamics so that the world does most of the work for them.

I don't see it. If a bird stops flapping its wings, but leaves them spread, it glides. If it pulls them in, it falls.

If a plane stops its engines, it drops like a brick.

Birds are just better at it.

Point is, when they cease to use their own power, they are no longer flying.

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Reply #26 on: September 25, 2010, 04:24:40 PM
I liked the idea that she's trying to uncover this past "fantasy" life at the same time I kind of wanted to hear a little
more magic coming from the story as well. I am all for the mystery of dreams and such, but the entire time I was waiting for
something to occur in her "real" world as well. The narrator's stoic voice helps add to that I think, by giving the character of
Brenda an almost depressed feel.
Not to say that the story depressed me, but I could feel a bit of the frustration she was feeling as the dreams were leading up
to, both I and her hoped, some kind of fantastical revelation about herself and her brothers, and for me her situation in the story
itself.

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Reply #27 on: September 26, 2010, 01:51:16 AM
I really enjoy this story - ravens, past lives and all... An interesting conjunction of older myths that was told well. It reveals enough without telling it all.

btw Ravens do spend a lot of time just riding the wind - I see them out my window every day and I found the descriptions apt.



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Reply #28 on: September 27, 2010, 04:40:24 AM
I think I would have enjoyed this story more if there was more background on the brothers and why the king felt like he had to kill them. I thought it was touching to hear how she held onto her twin in the womb and tried to keep him alive. Over all it was OK, but near the end it got very confusing and I had trouble keeping track of the dream world.

Flying is not controlled falling. Gliding is controlled falling.

How so? I'd say it's pretty apt.

When you are gliding, you are using just the wind to control how you travel. A glider must start on a high cliff or mountain side. When flying in a plane, you have an engine that moves you through the air, and you can control where, and how you travel. Somehow, I do not think birds are falling normally. That was just what Brenna had tell herself to be able to let go.



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Reply #29 on: September 27, 2010, 05:42:59 AM
Awesome story.  I really enjoyed the thematic meat of this one, the simultaneous desire to change the past and inability to refuse the sacrifice, the idea that sometimes you just have to accept what is.  I appreciate that the brothers were not vengeance-oriented, as so often happens in such stories.  Lots of interesting symbolic threads that connect all over the place.  Chewy.

Stories like this are one of the reasons I like PodCastle.



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Reply #30 on: September 28, 2010, 04:48:13 AM
from jeff bridges latest movie i prefer the spin of, "funny how falling feels like flying. for a little while"
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Reply #31 on: September 28, 2010, 04:25:09 PM
"That wasn't flying!  That was -- falling with style!" - Woody

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Reply #32 on: September 28, 2010, 10:29:10 PM
I really liked this story.  I have had dreams of flying, and missing brothers, and a fear of heights all my life.  The dreamlike quality of the story spoke to me personally.  I'd love to think that I was as well-loved as the protagonist.



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Reply #33 on: September 29, 2010, 08:42:47 AM
Like others I felt  the dream-like quality of the story was very well worked out.

This is a case where hearing it as a podcast is better than reading it on the page where you might be tempted to go back and re-read a passage to work out exactly what happened. Instead you have to just go with the flow as you listen and try to work out as you go along.

The imagery is very well expressed to make it heavy with portent.

At the end I was left pondering what did it all mean but that was a plus point for the story not a minus.

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Reply #34 on: September 29, 2010, 01:08:25 PM
I enjoyed the mystical, native american element in this story.  I've always enjoyed stories of that kind and this one was a great addition to them all.  Great reading on the part of the Narrator.



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Reply #35 on: September 29, 2010, 11:30:37 PM
The author really captured the feeling of being in a dream, but it didn't really draw me in.  I'm not a fan of dreamy and vague narrative in general, maybe because I don't usually remember my dreams, but I prefer a little bit more of a cohesive plot.  Also, I didn't feel much attachment to anyone in the story--not even Brenna--so it was hard to get into it.



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Reply #36 on: September 30, 2010, 08:13:36 AM
Just too dreamy for me.



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Reply #37 on: September 30, 2010, 08:24:00 PM
I'm fascinated by ravens and crows, and the complicated mythology and symbology surrounding them. Even so, this story didn't resonate with me. Brenna was just so passive. Everyone around her was doing things to her, or for her, or at her - she was the absorber of the actions of others.  Until the very end, when she finally made a decision and did something. I'm still not sure what she did, or what her decision was, or even what the question was. But at that point the narrative ceased to feel so oppressive, and ended well.

That and - like a previous poster, the repeated phrase "back and back and back" just made me think of chickens.



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Reply #38 on: September 30, 2010, 10:48:40 PM
I am, and will always be, a total sucker for raven stories. And I love that she acknowledged the distinct lack of ravens in that part of the country. More Tempest, please?



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Reply #39 on: October 01, 2010, 06:54:03 PM
I was worried when I first started listening because it seemed so very much like one of my favorite farietales, the one with the 7 black swan brothers. But this story acknowleged that tale and still had more to say. I liked it

I liked that about this story, how you could pick out threads of other tales all woven together to make a unique story.  I also greatly enjoyed the dream narrative style, where you couldn't really tell what was going on, especially at the end.  And how aspects of her real life (Scott, for example) started to get mixed up with the reality forming out of her dreams.

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Reply #40 on: December 14, 2010, 04:32:33 PM
Very dreamy. The fairy tale of the 12 brothers have always been one of my favorite stories. I like how Tempest melded that into her story. Liked it a lot, though I must confess, every time I heard the line, "Flying is controlled falling", I kept thinking about Arthur Dent learning to fly in the Hitchhiker series.

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Reply #41 on: January 14, 2012, 06:25:38 AM
Very dreamy. The fairy tale of the 12 brothers have always been one of my favorite stories. I like how Tempest melded that into her story. Liked it a lot, though I must confess, every time I heard the line, "Flying is controlled falling", I kept thinking about Arthur Dent learning to fly in the Hitchhiker series.

"There is an art, it says, or rather, a knack to flying. The knack lies in learning how to throw yourself at the ground and miss. … Clearly, it is this second part, the missing, which presents the difficulties."

I spent most of my time during this story thinking about Arthur Dent.

The part that wasn't occupied by Arthur Dent and a a liquid that was almost, but not quite, entirely unlike tea, was occupied with the Dream Quest of Unknown Kadath. And how much I really didn't like that story, except for the part with Pickman. And maybe the part with the cats. I need my dream stories to come with murderous moon cats and Pickman, and this one had neither.

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Reply #42 on: January 18, 2012, 05:49:05 PM
a liquid that was almost, but not quite, entirely unlike tea,

That's my favorite joke from Hitchhiker's Guide.  I think of it often, trying to imagine what it tasted like.

I've read a few slush stories that used a similar negativized description, but not for comedy.  Something like "Doris was as beautiful as Agnes wasn't."  That sort of thing doesn't really work as a serious description, because (in this case) beauty is a spectrum, not a binary set.  All that sentence does is block out a single value in the spectrum, still leaving infinite values remaining.  But it's fun when used for comedy, simply because of that vagueness.  :)



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Reply #43 on: March 30, 2012, 05:27:30 PM
I've read a few slush stories that used a similar negativized description, but not for comedy.  Something like "Doris was as beautiful as Agnes wasn't."  That sort of thing doesn't really work as a serious description, because (in this case) beauty is a spectrum, not a binary set.  All that sentence does is block out a single value in the spectrum, still leaving infinite values remaining.

That may be literally true in a mathematical sense, but it's not at all what the author intends by it. To use your example, the author does have a spectrum in mind, with beauty at one end and lack of beauty at the other. Doris and Agnes are at points equidistant from the midpoint, but on opposite sides of it. If it were a numerical scale, their absolute values would be equal, but their signs wouldn't match.


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Reply #44 on: April 02, 2012, 01:45:05 PM
I've read a few slush stories that used a similar negativized description, but not for comedy.  Something like "Doris was as beautiful as Agnes wasn't."  That sort of thing doesn't really work as a serious description, because (in this case) beauty is a spectrum, not a binary set.  All that sentence does is block out a single value in the spectrum, still leaving infinite values remaining.

That may be literally true in a mathematical sense, but it's not what at all what the author intends by it. To use your example, the author does have a spectrum in mind, with beauty at one end and lack of beauty at the other. Doris and Agnes are at points equidistant from the midpoint, but on opposite sides of it. If it were a numerical scale, their absolute values would be equal, but their signs wouldn't match.

I do understand what the author is trying to say in cases like that.  I just find the method clumsy and it works way too hard on being clever instead of providing a description that I can actually use to flesh out my internal image of the story.  

And yes, I'm a geek, so the fact that it makes little semantic sense when read literally does annoy me.  I've started watching Big Bang Theory lately, and Sheldon (annoying as he can be) said it well:  "That's a semantically null sentence." (in response to "we'll see what we can see").  In this case it's not precisely null, since we know that the two are not precisely as attractive as each other, but it has infinitesimal semantic value.

Actually, I do rather like your explanation of their beauties having the same absolute magnitude but having different signs, that makes some sense to me, though it's not how I would've thought of a scale of beauty.  In that case a 0 value would not be an ugly person but one who is utterly unremarkable.  Interesting...
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