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Reply #100 on: March 03, 2011, 02:46:48 PM
Another day, another... whatever.

Set Down This [-1]

The Hand You're Dealt [+1]

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Reply #101 on: March 03, 2011, 04:11:17 PM
her collection of intimacy loses another point to set down this

[ 9] Oil of Dog (200)
[ 8] The Dreaming Way (182)
[ 8] Acceptable Losses (191)
-1[ 8] The Hand You're Dealt (196)
[ 8] The Nimble Men (210)
+1[ 7] Papa Was a Gypsy (207)
[ 6] The Dark Level (188)
+1[ 6] Set Down This (197)
[ 5] Bird in a Wrought Iron Cage (175)
[ 5] Spirit of Nationalism (181)
[ 4] Is This a Horror Story? (206)
-1[ 3] Her Collection of Intimacy (204)


our elimination rate has slowed dramatically.  in order to crown a champion in a timely fashion the lowest ranked story (or stories) will begin to lose one point every day.

this will start a couple days from now, let us know if you see a problem doing this.
« Last Edit: March 03, 2011, 04:13:20 PM by deflective »



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Reply #102 on: March 03, 2011, 04:18:35 PM
[-1] The hand you're dealth
[+1] her collection of intimacy



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Reply #103 on: March 03, 2011, 04:59:47 PM
[-1] The Hand You're Dealt
[+1] The Dreaming Way

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Reply #104 on: March 04, 2011, 07:36:48 AM
Another day, another... reverse Steph.

Set Down This [+1]

The Hand You're Dealt [-1]



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Reply #105 on: March 04, 2011, 02:57:37 PM
Another day, another sausage.

Set Down This [-1]

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Reply #106 on: March 04, 2011, 04:00:29 PM
-1 to the hand you're dealt (wooo! good ol' fashioned bum's rush), +1 to oil of dog

+1[10] Oil of Dog (200)
+1[ 9] The Dreaming Way (182)
[ 8] Acceptable Losses (191)
[ 8] The Nimble Men (210)
[ 7] Papa Was a Gypsy (207)
[ 6] The Dark Level (188)
[ 6] Set Down This (197)
[ 5] Bird in a Wrought Iron Cage (175)
[ 5] Spirit of Nationalism (181)
-3[ 5] The Hand You're Dealt (196)
+1[ 4] Her Collection of Intimacy (204)
[ 4] Is This a Horror Story? (206)


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Reply #107 on: March 04, 2011, 04:29:33 PM
I like to look at stories that are even in points and give from what I felt was a weaker story and give to the stronger.

[-1] The Hand You're Dealt
[+1] Bird in a Wrought Iron Cage

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Reply #108 on: March 04, 2011, 04:30:48 PM
"Set Down This" is now two points above "The Hand You're Dealt". This is a crime against everything in the universe worth living for.

[rage quit]
Fuck this, I'm out.

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Reply #109 on: March 04, 2011, 06:06:10 PM
Fuck this, I'm out.
Hey, alright

edit: crap, youtube time links don't work very well do they?  If it doesn't take you there, go to 1:22.  Goddamnit youtube.
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I'd like to hear my options, so I could weigh them, what do you say?
Five pounds?  Six pounds? Seven pounds?


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Reply #110 on: March 04, 2011, 06:47:48 PM
+1 Her collection of intimacy
-1 spirit of nationalism



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Reply #111 on: March 05, 2011, 03:00:49 PM
Both good war stories, but I find the pacific a more compelling setting than freezing winter in Russia.

+1 Acceptable Losses
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Reply #112 on: March 05, 2011, 03:33:41 PM
Fuck this, I'm out.
Hey, alright

edit: crap, youtube time links don't work very well do they?  If it doesn't take you there, go to 1:22.  Goddamnit youtube.

Looked more like 1:27 or 1:28 to me. But hey, alright.

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Reply #113 on: March 05, 2011, 04:42:39 PM
-1 to the dark level and +1 to spirit of nationalism.

this lines up spirit of nationalism, the hand you're dealt, and is this a horror story? so they all lose a point.  it also looks like we've had our first player elimination, the slaughterhouse ain't for the faint at heart.

[10] Oil of Dog (200)
[ 9] The Dreaming Way (182)
+1[ 9] Acceptable Losses (191)
[ 8] The Nimble Men (210)
[ 7] Papa Was a Gypsy (207)
+1[ 6] Bird in a Wrought Iron Cage (175)
[ 6] Set Down This (197)
-1[ 5] The Dark Level (188)
+1[ 5] Her Collection of Intimacy (204)
-2[ 3] Spirit of Nationalism (181)
-2[ 3] The Hand You're Dealt (196)
-1[ 3] Is This a Horror Story? (206)



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Reply #114 on: March 05, 2011, 04:49:56 PM
[+1] The dreaming way
[-1] The nimble men



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Reply #115 on: March 05, 2011, 06:04:41 PM
[-1] Oil of Dog
[+1] Is This a Horror Story?

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Reply #116 on: March 05, 2011, 08:31:33 PM
[-1] The Dreaming Way
[+1] Papa Was a Gypsy

Leveling out the top, to match the leveling out the bottom.



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Reply #117 on: March 06, 2011, 04:07:09 PM
the dark level loses a point to acceptable losses.

+1[10] Acceptable Losses (191)
[ 9] The Dreaming Way (182)
-1[ 9] Oil of Dog (200)
+1[ 8] Papa Was a Gypsy (207)
-1[ 7] The Nimble Men (210)
[ 6] Bird in a Wrought Iron Cage (175)
[ 6] Set Down This (197)
[ 5] Her Collection of Intimacy (204)
-1[ 4] The Dark Level (188)
+1[ 4] Is This a Horror Story? (206)
-1[ 2] Spirit of Nationalism (181)
-1[ 2] The Hand You're Dealt (196)



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Reply #118 on: March 06, 2011, 04:43:29 PM
+1 Oil of dog
-1 Bird in a wraught iron cage



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Reply #119 on: March 06, 2011, 09:18:04 PM
[-1] Papa Was a Gypsy
[+1] Nimble Men

Nimble Men was more internally consistent and had fewer flaws. It was stronger by hiding details and giving us just enough of a glimpse. In Papa - why did she have to kill her little brother? Why did she wander around for quite some time after being impaled through-and-through by a thrown sharpened stick? So I'm going to have to keep Nimble Men above Papa.

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Reply #120 on: March 07, 2011, 01:15:25 AM
[-1] The Dreaming Way
[+1] Papa Was a Gypsy

I like The Nimble Men too, so I don't want the points to come from there.  The Dreaming Way didn't really impress me though.  Both Papa Was a Gypsy and Nimble Men I found to actually be scary.  And Oil of Dog is probably my favorite, for what that is worth.

Now let me defend Papa for a moment:
She absolutely didn't have to kill her brother, there was no reason for it.  That was kind of the point, to my reading.  She killed him because she was completely out of control and was making increasingly less justified decisions and hurting even the things she loved for no good reason.  Also, the main character didn't get impaled by a sharpened stick.  It was the Grandmother, she died (we thought) and then wasn't dead due to being evil and magical and diabolical and whatnot.  The whole thing was a sort of Xanatos Gambit by Grandma.

Here is a bit of a thing I wrote after first listening:
You're never sure how in-control Elma really is, until the end, but you can vaguely feel her slipping, especially any of her thoughts involving power. I like all the ghosts, and the seeming ghostly chain-reaction, set off by Mama at the beginning, where Elma is increasingly more and more haunted. You really get a feel for everything spiraling out of control.  ... Celebi has created a great (if hard to understand motivationally) villain by the end of the story, and the smaller ghost and charm level supernatural elements were entirely necessary. But why not leave it at that, with the possibility of interpreting the whole things as psychosis + superstition, rather than firmly committing to the supernatural?

That said, the ending is actually pretty good, Elma's emotions are perfectly described, you really feel for her, and the final line about love is great. Overall, Elma is an extremely well-drawn character, and the Southern Gothic setting is pretty well done too. I just wish we'd learned a bit more about Regina.



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Reply #121 on: March 07, 2011, 04:05:19 PM
bird in a wrought iron cage -1, the nimble men +1

[10] Acceptable Losses (191)
+1[10] Oil of Dog (200)
+2[ 9] The Nimble Men (210)
-1[ 8] The Dreaming Way (182)
[ 8] Papa Was a Gypsy (207)
[ 6] Set Down This (197)
[ 5] Her Collection of Intimacy (204)
-2[ 4] Bird in a Wrought Iron Cage (175)
[ 4] The Dark Level (188)
[ 4] Is This a Horror Story? (206)
-1[ 1] Spirit of Nationalism (181)
-1[ 1] The Hand You're Dealt (196)



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Reply #122 on: March 07, 2011, 04:10:16 PM
[+1] The hand you're dealt
[-1] The dark level

Brining the hand you're dealt up from the brink, because even though I felt its ending let it down, it deserves to last longer than the spirit of nationalism (which is a perfectly decent story, mind you, but not much more than that).



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Reply #123 on: March 07, 2011, 06:12:07 PM
[+1] The hand you're dealt
[-1] The dark level

Brining the hand you're dealt up from the brink, because even though I felt its ending let it down, it deserves to last longer than the spirit of nationalism (which is a perfectly decent story, mind you, but not much more than that).

It definitely deserves to outlive "Set Down This". But it's not a fair world, and almost nobody ever gets what they deserve.

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Reply #124 on: March 07, 2011, 06:34:53 PM
[-1] Papa Was a Gypsy
[+1] Bird in a Wrought Iron Cage

I listened to Papa twice and I still missed the other person getting stabbed. The author created great mood and had florid descriptions, but I found the action scenes lacking. And the back half of the story requires good action writing.

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