Hi, Nomine.
Right off the bat, let me recommend the critique group critters:
www.critters.org. You'll get to review stories and put some of your own in the queue to be critiqued, and it should serve you well.
I read the story and found two issues off the bat:
The first is grammar. Your tale needs some grammar control, my friend. Frequent grammatical mistakes will get your tale tossed out 99% of the time. Allow me to elaborate with an example:
If one puts out 3 of cups you will need 4 of any kind to beat him. Now if somebody sits with the high cards on their hand. Well the stakes can`t be much higher.
...should be re-written as:
Three cups are only beaten by four of a kind. If somebody sits with that hand, stakes are high.
Even so, that still isn't perfect. This is why you must learn to think like a reader. Can you tell me what is wrong with that second sentence?
The second issue is background detail. For example, this is a multi-race world. So is the protagonist male? Female? What race? You can't rely on your readers assuming anything unless you allude to it.
Consider checking out the "Keep it Active" link ony my website-- you'll see the link in my signature.
Don't want to discourage you, my friend. Issues aside, the tale held my interest and I still found it enjoyable. You can learn everything else -- your talent, even at these early stages, is already obvious.