Steph, if you do a rerecording, I'd like to see you interact more with the material -- not in a cutesy way, but you did not seem, to me, to be narratively interpreting the material so much as just sort of reading. I'd suggest thinking more about varying intonation. Also, the new mic might clean this up, but there were noises between your sentences that I wasn't fond of.
Let me know if you do another recording and I'll take another listen.